Welcome to another Six Sentence Sunday! Today I have something new for you. It’s from a WIP I began writing last spring called Appearances, an adventure story spanning time. My MC is a private eye named Eric Neil. In this opening six, Eric meets a beautiful and mysterious woman who somehow seems to know him. Enjoy!
Appearances
“Not very subtle, are you?” Savannah James said, grinning in that jaded way a beautiful woman grins when she sees right through you and you know she’s not simply going to succumb to your charm and good looks.
“Subtlety’s overrated,” I said. “I prefer the direct approach.”
I escorted her into my office, her composure fading as she nervously settled herself into the leather chair facing my desk and began to tell me what prompted her visit.
“You wanna run that by me again?” I said, leaning forward a bit from behind my desk when she finished, not quite certain I’d heard her correctly.
Savannah James was clearly tense, frightened, as she repeated her story about a terrorist plot, hatched ten years in the future, which would be carried out right here in D.C. in three days.
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Great introduction of her character. Great snippet.
Thanks Alix!
Sounds like it’s going to be right up my ally. Thanks for sharing your six today.
Hi Ginger! Thank you! Sharing’s my pleasure.
That last sentence reeled me in. Great six!
Thanks as always Jessica!
You have such a natural flow to your sentences that always manage to draw me right in. Once again, great 6, Ryan.
Hi Julie! *huge grin* Thank you!!
Nice! You do a fine job of grabbing reader attention here! Whew, and that last line is a definite page turner. This is a good sample of your talent!
Hi Kelly! Thanks!! What a great compliment!!
I love the description of her grin. So you guys do know when we see right through you? Well, that’s good to know! LOL!
Well written six, Ry. She quickly moves from the confidence of her smile to fear as her story unfolds. Nicely done.
…and that picture! A sign of things to come?
We may not always know… Eric couldn’t miss it though. Thank you for the compliments on my writing. That means a lot! The picture is absolutely a sign of things to come.
Very awesome intro! Can’t wait to read more!
Thanks Dee!! I really appreciate that!
Awesome intro into these characters and the plot. I can’t wait to see what happens!
Hi Heather and Thank you!!
Great description of Savannah in that first sentence. As always, I’m a sucker for a time travel adventure / romance story.
Exactly what this story has in store.
I’m thrilled you liked the opening sentences, Claire. Thank you!!
Very cool. Love that little mindbender at the end. Nice 6, Ryan.
Hi Cara!! Thanks for stopping by and thank you for that nice comment!
What? That’s it?! When are you getting this story published? I want more. Now!
Great job
Lol. Thanks Ana!!
Another time travel writer, yay! Great 6! Am intrigued now…
Gotta love time travel adventures, right? Thank you Angela!!
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very good hook!
Thanks so much Jay!
No, it’s not his famous charm and good looks unsettling her… it’s time-traveling and terrorist plots. (Is there jet lag from time travel?)
That’s enough to unsettle anyone, isn’t it?
Thanks for reading E.P.
Very intense six!! I am already hooked!!
Thank you!!
Wow–very nice! Hooked me too. I loved the way you describe Savannah’s “jaded” smile–it’s a fresh voice, and I love it. Thanks for sharing!
Thanks Guilie!!
I like the time travel element too! Also, though this combo of characters has a film noir feel, having it set in something more like a sci fi mystery gives it an interesting twist. Sci fi noir! -grin- Nice job Ryan!
As always Tiff, your comment captures the essence of what I’m writing, both in the feel or atmosphere I’m going for and the plot possibilities. I’m happy that comes through and that the plot makes sense.